精彩的焰火Fireworks Music to the Eyes and Ear.

et off in different formations. I could admire the fireworks in the sky as well as their reflections in the water.
Arising from the River surface to the height of 300 meters in the sky, multi-layered and rich colored fireworks formulated an extremely spectacular picture. One of the most eye catchers was that nearly 1000 sparkling pieces of fireworks along the surface of the water formed a red carpet with 80 meters long and 250 meters wide. At the same time, a 10 meter-high waterfall firework rushed downwards the bridge across Jingtian Lake and simultaneously the red lantern shaped fireworks filled the sky. It really took me on a romantic tour as the fireworks explode.
Wish for next chance to see such kind of music fireworks again!

简 评
这是一篇记叙文。记叙文的写作，首先当然要注意时间顺序，这一点容易做到。不容易做到的是详略得当、主次分明、中心突出。而这正是这篇文章做得比较好的地方。国庆是欢乐的时候、休闲的时候、放松的时候。这位同学写国庆没有面面俱到，而是选取其中印象最深的音乐焰火来写，将其中焰火燃放的场面写得比较详细。看过烟火的人都知道，这种场面看起来壮观精彩，写起来却很不容易。一是同学熟悉议论文的写作，场面描写却是软肋；二是这种壮观的场面太难以捉摸了。这篇文章在这一块着墨不多，描写也难说精彩，但总算是一个良好的开始。

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